More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?
It is apparent that nowadays most
of
Change preposition
apply
people
are considering Use synonyms
to move
from rural Change the verb form
moving
area
to urban Fix the agreement mistake
areas
area
to make a living. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
This
occurrence Linking Words
effects
Verb problem
results
on increase
crime rates and Change preposition
in increased
traffic
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congestion
in Use synonyms
Use synonyms
city
. To address these problems, the Add an article
the city
government
should provide opportunities to grow small Use synonyms
Use synonyms
business
and increase public transport Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Use synonyms
vehicle
. Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
This
essay will explore the reasons and mention possible solutions.
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Firstly
, competition for jobs in big cities Linking Words
are
not Change the verb form
is
easy
as expected. Big companies require high Rephrase
as easy
requirement
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requirements
while
the opportunities to get a job are small. Linking Words
This
could be a problem for Linking Words
people
who Use synonyms
does
not meet the requirement and they usually do anything to survive. Committing criminal crimes is one way to survive, Change the verb form
do
such
as stealing and scamming. Linking Words
Secondly
, more Linking Words
people
living in Use synonyms
Use synonyms
city
leads to Add an article
the city
a city
traffic
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congestion
on the roads. Use synonyms
For instance
, Jakarta is a metropolitan Linking Words
city
where a lot of Use synonyms
people
come to work using their own Use synonyms
vehicle
which Use synonyms
is makes
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makes
congestion
. Use synonyms
This
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is
not only Unnecessary verb
apply
make
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makes
people
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takes
longer to Change the verb form
take
goes
Wrong verb form
go
to
one place to anotherChange preposition
from
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
contributes to air pollution.
To improve Linking Words
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this situations
, the Change the determiner
this situation
these situations
government
needs to pay attention to their Use synonyms
people
. Create opportunities Use synonyms
to
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for to
people
run their own Use synonyms
Use synonyms
business
and guide them to grow their Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Use synonyms
business
. Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
For example
, Indonesia has a small enterprise called Micro, Small and Medium Enterprise (MSME) which Linking Words
help
to grow Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
business
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the Linking Words
government
should provide Use synonyms
an
interconnected public transportation and many Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
vehicle
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vehicles
so
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to
that
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apply
helps
Correct subject-verb agreement
help
on
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with
traffic
Use synonyms
congestion
. Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
the
developed countries build Correct article usage
apply
a
good urban planning that Remove the article
apply
support
Change the verb form
supports
people
to use a lot of public transportation or go on Use synonyms
walk
. Fix the agreement mistake
walks
This
will decrease the Linking Words
traffic
Use synonyms
jam
in big cities Fix the agreement mistake
jams
such
as Jakarta.
In conclusion, the idea of Linking Words
people
considering Use synonyms
to move
from Change the verb form
moving
small
Correct article usage
a small
city
to Use synonyms
big
Correct article usage
a big
city
will Use synonyms
impacts
Change the verb form
impact
on
their lifestyle. Some criminal acts and long Change preposition
apply
traffic
jams might occur in Use synonyms
big
Add an article
a big
the big
Use synonyms
city
, Fix the agreement mistake
cities
therefore
the Linking Words
government
should Use synonyms
helps
Change the verb form
help
people
to grow small Use synonyms
Use synonyms
business
and increase public transport Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Use synonyms
vehicle
.Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
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