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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee ans bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European counties. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee ans bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European counties. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables show the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labeled
coffee
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 and bananas in five European countries—
UK
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,
Switzerland
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,
Denmark
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, Belgium, and Sweden—in 1999 and 2004. In 1999,
Switzerland
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 had the highest
coffee
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sales
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, reaching 3
million
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euros
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,
while
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Denmark
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 followed with 1.8
million
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euros
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. By 2004,
however
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, the
UK
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 experienced a dramatic rise, jumping from 1.5 to 20
million
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euros
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. At the same time,
Switzerland
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’s
sales
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 doubled to 6
million
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euros
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. In comparison,
Denmark
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, Belgium, and Sweden saw only minor increases or stayed relatively steady in
coffee
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sales
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. For bananas, the
UK
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 showed remarkable growth, surging from 15 to 47
million
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euros
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.
Similarly
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,
Switzerland
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 saw a significant increase from 1 to 5.5
million
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euros
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, and
Denmark
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 rose from 0.6 to 4
million
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euros
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.
On the other hand
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, Belgium’s
sales
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 dropped slightly from 1.8 to 1
million
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euros
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,
while
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 Sweden’s remained nearly stable at just under 1
million
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euros
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.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 and
Switzerland
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 saw the most substantial growth in both products, with the
UK
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 leading in 2004 for
coffee
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 and bananas.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, switzerland, denmark, million, euros, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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