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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts information about the ratio of
women
unemployment
 in four countries of
United
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 Kingdom in two years 2013 and 2014. After analysing the bar graph, it can be seen clearly that a negligible difference was found in the
unemployment
 rates of
women
 in 2013 and 2014 in London
while
 in Wales, the
unemployment
rate
 was slightly higher in 2013 than in 2014 by a difference of 4%.
Furthermore
, it is noticeable that the joblessness
rate
 of
women
 in England and Wales was greater in 2013 than in 2014.
Further
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 the bar graph shows that in 2013, the
unemployment
rate
 of
women
 was 6.1% which increased to 6.7% in 2014 in Scotland
however
, in the fourth country of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, in 2013 the
rate
 of
unemployment
 for
women
 was 5.6% which declined to 4.6% in 2014.it is obvious that, in Scotland the
unemployment
rate
 was upper in 2013whilst it was lowest in 2014 in Northern Ireland .
Overall
, the
unemployment
rate
 was highest in England
whereas
 it was down in
the
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Northern Ireland.
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