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Working big company is better than working small company? Give your opinion.

#company
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I strongly believe that going to a large
company
 has many benefits in
the
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respect
of
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to
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wage
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wages
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,
wealthfare
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wealth
 and
better
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a better
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 work system. Some
people
 think that the advantages of going
a
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to a
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small
company
 outweigh the drawbacks of working there because of
fast-faced
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decision making
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 and efficient work system.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 idea. First of all, working
a
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in a
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small
company
 gives us less money because it
create
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 a small amount of profits rather than
big
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a big
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company
's revenue. Money is
very
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 important factor for us to sustain a better quality of life. To achieve
this
, working
a
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in a
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big
company
 is more likely to bring high wages to us.
Secondly
, a big
company
 has more facilities in the office
such
 as
gym
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a gym
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, cafeteria and healing zone.
People
 can enjoy
high quality
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 welfare systems
as well as
 big wages.
Thirdly
, the
datas
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data
 of big
company
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companies
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help
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helps
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 employees
to
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deal with
the
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tough situations. They lead
staffs
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staff
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 to make better
decisons
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decisions
 whenever
people
 need good solutions. In my case, there are a
l ot
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lot
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 of seniors and a variety of guidelines in my workplace, so I can ask a lot of questions to seniors and I can
also
 get valuable
advices
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advice
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 from them.
In addition
, big
datas
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data
 enable me to make a way better
choice
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choices
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. Even though some
people
 argue that it takes more time for working big
company
 to make a final decision rather than smaller
company
, I strongly believe that the benefits of working
a
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for a
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huge
company
outweighs
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 its drawbacks.
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introduction conclusion present
Start by clearly outlining the main arguments in the introduction for better clarity.
supported main points
Ensure all main points are well-supported with specific examples or surveys if available.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on developing more concise paragraphs to enhance clarity of ideas.
complete response
Good effort in presenting multiple reasons for your opinion.
introduction conclusion present
Introduction and conclusion present clearly stated position on the topic.
logical structure
The essay effectively contrasts views of working in large and small companies.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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