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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The two bar charts depict the post-graduation career paths of UK graduates and postgraduates in 2008, excluding those who entered full-time employment. Both groups show similar trends, with
further
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 education being the most popular option, followed by part-time
work
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, unemployment, and volunteering, which had the fewest participants. Among graduates, just under 30, 000 pursued
further
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 studies,
while
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 16, 235 were unemployed—approximately half that number. Those engaged in part-time
work
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 numbered slightly higher at 17, 735. Volunteering was the least common choice, with five times fewer participants than part-time
work
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.
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, the number of graduates in the study was nearly ten times greater than postgraduates. Among postgraduates, 2, 735 chose
further
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 education,
while
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 1, 675 were unemployed. Interestingly, part-time
work
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 deviated from the tenfold pattern, with a relatively high figure of 2, 600.
Lastly
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, volunteering remained the least popular choice, with just 300 participants.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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