With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The advancement of communication technology makes our

life

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convenient. We communicate with our families and friends easily through online.

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to other cities and countries can keep in touch with their family members.

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, in Australia, people communicate with their families through online. They believe it is the most convenient way to communicate.

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coherence cohesion

Expand your arguments to offer a more cohesive analysis. Currently, the essay has a brief structure with an incomplete argument development.

coherence cohesion

Include a formal introduction and conclusion to clarify your stance on whether the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

task achievement

Provide more detailed examples to support your arguments and demonstrate a deeper analysis of both the advantages and disadvantages.

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Clarify your position regarding whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Ensure your opinion is clearly stated from the start.

task achievement

The essay clearly acknowledges the convenience that communication technology offers, which is relevant to the topic.

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The essay includes an example, such as people in Australia using online communication to stay in touch, which helps illustrate the point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

55 words

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With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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in some places, old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important.

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. *why might this be the case *Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. why might this be the case Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?