Some people believe that allowing their children to make their own choises on every day matter (such as food,clothes and entertainment ) is likely to result in a society of indevisualse who only think about their own wishes .other people belive that it important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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will result in a selfish generation. I personally think given kids the choice for their daily matters it's so important to build their character but it should done wisely with some limitations and rules. On one hand, giving

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him to prepare his meal, the parent can offer two or three meals and make him choose between them. That will definitely make him analyze his options and make logical choices, and that could only done under the guidance of

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to disobedience. They believe that

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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