Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those whose are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public area. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Smoking should be banned in public places because it affects the surrounding people of the smoker. Research states that non-smokers
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more affected by passive smoking than
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active smokers. Non-smokers do not have
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to avoid the harm of smoking that active smokers have.
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, in public places, there are
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adults, pregnant women and children who get severely affected by passive smoking. They find it difficult to travel by public transport.
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, in Australia, the primary cause of respiratory diseases is passive smoking.
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is because the government do not take proper measures to save people from passive smoking.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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