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The rise of social media platforms has made easier for people to vent their frustration and complaints publicly. What are advantages and disadvantages of such a trend?

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Social
media
 has turned the whole world into
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golbal
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global
 village .It has enabled the masses to express their point of view freely.
Although
 a lot of
people
 are
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against
this
,But concur
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 that the positive impacts of
this
 are more than
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negative
.
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 the impending paragraphs,
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 will elucidate
this
.
To begin
 with,
Internet
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the Internet
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 has given the
people
rights
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right
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 to express their thoughts freely.In the past,
People
 were not able to comment on the performance of the government because the communication channels were not fast.
However
,It is easy to express your own thoughts,if you see something
that is
 not good for
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society.Another heated argument in
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favor
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 is that
people
 are more frugal about their actions today
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 because they think if they involve themselves in something
that is
 immoral it is hard to hide it.So,it encourages the sensation of self-correction in them.
For instance
, about one decade ago ,Powerful
people
particulary
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particularly
 in
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 countries could do whatever they
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,they used to influence the
media
 for their own
intersts
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interests
.
On the contrary
,Others think
think
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that it has given the undue freedom to the
people
 .They can post anything on social
media
 which is beyond the facts.For,example
people
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media
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sometimes
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 criticize others without
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 the things factually.
Secondly
,
People
 think that it has compromised the privacy of the
people
.Now ,
People
 are not hesitant to talk about the private issues publicly.
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Lastly
,Social
media
 is
also
 considered to be the source to prevail the false news .
For example
,most of the
coutries
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countries
 have banned a few social
media
 apps because they think it misguides the
people
 about the policies of the
goverment
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government
 that could
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 the
soveignity
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sovereignty
 of the nation drastically. In conclusion ,
although
 it has some drawbacks,
but
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i
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 strongly concur that freedom of speech is the fundamental right of everyone.Social
media
 has given the public
this
 right to respond to
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things instantly if they do not think it correct.
This
also
 compels everyone particularly governments to perform without
expoiting
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exploiting
 the social norms
otherwise
 they would have to face
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criticism.
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task response
Try to balance the discussion of both advantages and disadvantages for an equitable analysis.
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of the trend, showcasing a balanced perspective.
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The introduction and conclusion are present, framing the essay clearly.
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The essay includes relevant arguments for both sides of the issue, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
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