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The table below shows on consumer spending on different items in five diffrerent countries in 2002 .

The table below shows on consumer spending on different items in five diffrerent countries in 2002 .
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The table gives information about
variety
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a variety
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things
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of things
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 which users spending money
in
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on in
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 European and Asian
countries
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 in 2002.
Overall
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 , the category of
costumers
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customers
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 goods that all
countries
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 spent most of them on food, drinks and tobacco , which was three times higher
that
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than
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 other categories . Leisure and
aducation
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education
 were the lowest spending in
five
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the five
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countries
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. Turkey had more expenditure rather than
other
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the other
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 four
countries
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 . In terms of food , drinks and tobacco , Turkey spent
most
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 expenditure with 32.14 % . The outlay of Ireland was
also
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 high (28.91% ) compared to Sweden which
was
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lowest
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the lowest
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persentage
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percentage
 with 15.77 . Italy and Spain accounted for under 17%.
On the other hand
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 , the
consuption
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consumption
 of Leisure and education
were
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lowest
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the lowest
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 usage for under 5% in five
countries
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 .
The
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apply
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Clothing and footwear were
third
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the third
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 category of consumer goods and outlays for those items
between
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were between
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 9% in Italy and 5.4% in Sweden . The national spending
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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