The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of

ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the

main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
protrays
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portrays
the
porportions
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proportions
proportion
of
Polluntants
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pollutants
like Pollutants from
air
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the air
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,
fram
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farm
waste
, industrial
waste
, litter, marine, offshore oil and domestic sewage entering the surface of
ocean
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the ocean
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at specific parts in
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the year
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year
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years
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1997 and 2007.
Overall
,
most
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the most
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amount of
polluntants
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pollution
came from
air
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the air
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which is almost 30% in both years. Meanwhile, litter and industrial
waste
decreased in 2007 including farm
waste
and marine.
On the other hand
, Domestic sewage increased to 29% compared to
in
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1997 when it was 18%. Offshore oil went
upto
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up to
14% in 2007. comparitively it was around 5% in 1997.
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