“Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.”

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It is considered by some individuals,
increase
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in economic
development
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will help in solving the problem of poverty,
whereas
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, some said economic growth would
leads
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lead
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to
environmently
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environmental
environmentally
problem
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problems
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. I support the view that
,
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increase
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an increase
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in
economy
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the economy
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will help in generating more
job
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jobs
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which will help in solving the problem of unemployment. Meanwhile, industrial
development
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will
cause
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air
pollution
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and water
pollution
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. Rapid growth in
technology
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sector
allowing
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the
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foregin
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foreign
company to set up their business in
country
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the country
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, which will create
large
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number of
job
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jobs
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in each and
very
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every
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sector.
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, as the IT sector is increasing companies like TCS,
wipro
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etc hiring lots of young talents, as demand
raise
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rises
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companies are constructing many new offices and industrial, which are providing blue
collor
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collar
job
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jobs
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to
unexperienced
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inexperienced
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people. In
this
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way economic growth
help
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helps
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to end hunger and poverty.
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,
as
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apply
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the
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apply
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industrial
development
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will
cause
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environmental
issue
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issues
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. Many
foregin
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foreign
company
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companies
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will
setup there
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set up their
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plant
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plants
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to meet the demand,
this
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will lead to deforestation. Because large area will be required in
construction
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the construction
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of industries and
manufacting
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manufacturing
facilities.
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example
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chemical companies will generate a lot of smoke which will
cause
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air
pollution
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and many factories will throw their harmful waste
in
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river
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rivers
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which will
cause
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water
pollution
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. In conclusion, economic
development
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will help
in
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apply
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us
in
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apply
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over come
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overcome
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poverty by creating
opportunity
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opportunities
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for poor people,
however
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increase in
number
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a number
the number
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of factories will
cause
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environmently
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environmental
environmentally
issue
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issues
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coherence cohesion
Consider enhancing the essay's logical structure by using more connectors and transitions between ideas, to ensure seamless flow of arguments.
task achievement
Ensure task achievement by incorporating more varied examples and exploring both views more deeply.
task achievement
The essay successfully presents both views regarding economic growth and environmental concerns and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion, thus ensuring the task is properly addressed.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, showcasing a full structure in place.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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