The pie graph below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities ni which girls participate.

The pie graph below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities ni which girls participate.
The
presented
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apply
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pie graphs below
gives
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give
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the
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
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of a survey of children's
activities
. The first graph introduces the cultural and leisure
activities
that males participate in.
Whereas the
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The
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second graph presents
the
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apply
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information about the
activities
in which the females participate.
Overall
In
boys
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boy's
boys'
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Cultural and leisure
activities
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activities,
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the most popular
one
is Computer games with just around
the
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apply
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one
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apply
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third but for
females
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females,
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the most popular
activities
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activity
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is dancing. In the given pie chart there is
a
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the
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same number of people
which
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who
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choose the
listening
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listen
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music
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to music
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in
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at
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cultural
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a cultural
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festival
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festivals
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in both groups. Reading was not popular in
boy's
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the boy's
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group, only two
percent
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per cent
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but
twenty
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twenty-one
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one
percent
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per cent
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of
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the girls
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girls
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girls'
girl's
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group
was
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were
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interesred
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interested
in reading more than
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the boy's
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boy's
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boys
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.
Furthermore
a
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apply
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roughly
one quarter
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one-quarter
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of boys
are liked
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like
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to play basketball
in
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at
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festival
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festivals
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. Taking
closing
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a closing
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look at the second chart fifteen
percent
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per cent
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of Female
children's
Unnecessary verb
children
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participate in Netball in cultural festival
activities
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.

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