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the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in1968 and 2018.summarize the information and report main features

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in1968 and 2018.summarize the information and report main features
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The bar chart compares the average weekly family expenditure between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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,
while
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 most
families
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' income was allocated to food in 1968, leisure activities demanded a higher portion by 2018.
In contrast
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, expenditures on fuels and power were the least demanding need. In 1968, just over one-third of
families
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' income was spent on food, which was almost halved by the end of the period.
Additionally
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, people spent more on three areas in 2018 namely being: housing, transport, and leisure. The latter among the three witnessed the most significant increase and became dominant by the end of the period as 20% of
families
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' income was spent on it.
On the other hand
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, fuels and power turned out to be the least demanding goods, being relatively stable at around 5%.
However
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, in the
last
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 year,
families
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 spent the same amount on personal goods as fuels.
Moreover
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,
While
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 other spending habits changed, household goods remained unchanged at around 8%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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