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The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram represents the steps that are involved
while
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 processing
tea
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 leaves to obtain a certain type of type. The
digram
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 outlines the process
to make
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of making
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 White
Tea
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, Green
Tea
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, Oolong
Tea
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, Large
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 and Small
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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. The process of making
tea
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 begins with growing and plucking
tea
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 leaves, following specific steps before drying the material in the
oven
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. The variation between each kind differs a little as steaming and
rolloing
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rolling
following
 before
oven
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 drying would give Green
Tea
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instead
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 of White
Tea
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.
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While
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apply
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Tea
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 involves the least effort and time as growing, plucking, wilting and
oven
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 drying
needs
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need
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 to be done in order to obtain White
Tea
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. Adding the rolling
phase
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 and slightly fermenting the
tea
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 before
oven
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 drying would result in Oolong
Tea
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 and steaming before the rolling
phase
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 without fermenting would give Green
Tea
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.
Similarly
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, the process for Small
Leaf
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 and Large
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 is almost
same
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the same
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. To obtain Small
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 the
tea
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 leaves need to go through rolling and full fermentation
whereas
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 for Large
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 the
tea
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 leaves need to
be processes
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be processed
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 through
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the curshing
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curshing
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crushing
phase
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instead
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 of
rolling
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the rolling
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phase
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, leaf, oven, phase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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