All university students should do some voluntary work to help the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people hold a belief that engaging in
voluntareering
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volunteering
activity
is an obligation with all
students
in
university
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the university
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. In my opinion, I believe that voluntary
work
brings certain benefits to
students
and society but there exists some rationales that these activities should be optional. On the one hand,
doing
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volunteering
activity
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activities
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have
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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advantages for
students
. The first reason is that
students
can have rewarding
experience
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experiences
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owing to the meaningful things when they volunteer.
Furthermore
, the youths could improve their social responsibility and build up their CV. The candidates with
extra
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curriculum
are tend
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to be impressed by headhunters of enterprises
due to
their
activeveness
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activeness
and
helfulness
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helpfulness
for society.
As a result
,
students
could have more job opportunities and better career
prospect
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prospects
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. Another reason is that volunteering
activity
engagement may provide a huge workforce for
the
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social
work
,
therefore
, it contributes to
decrease
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the decrease
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of
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national
expense
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expenses
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. Thanks to the volunteers helping doing social
activity
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activities
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such
as cleaning streets or collecting
garbages
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, the government can save money for investing in other important needs.
On the other hand
, there exists certain drawbacks that not all
students
can do volunteering
work
obligationally. First of all, some
students
are not having enough physical health to participate in voluntary
activity
.
For instance
, the youths who have to suffer from heart
problem
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problems
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can not do burden activities or stay outside under the sun for a long time.
Secondly
, if
students
spend most of
time
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their time
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on
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volunteering, they
would
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not have enough time for studying, one of the most important duties when they
enroll
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in
university
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the university
a university
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. It could lead to pressure
for
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on
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students
and they might be distracted from their
study
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studies
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.
Hence
, their study and academic results will
be gone
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down gradually.
Lastly
, forcing all
students
engaging
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to engage in
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volunteering
go
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goes
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against the natural meaning of volunteering. A must of doing voluntary
work
might reduce
value
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of
goodess
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goodness
goods
because
the
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volunteering comes from
heart
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the heart
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in genuine. In conclusion,
while
I accept that participating in voluntary
work
brings about
the
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variety of benefits for both
students
and
local
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the local
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community, I
also
assume that it is impossible to
impose
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all
students
volunteer
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to volunteer
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.
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