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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

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 looked in 2000 compared to the present time. At first glance, it is evident that the
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 has undergone numerous changes. Interestingly, the car parks, the northern public beach, the lifeboat and the passenger ferries have remained the same over the years. Looking at the details, there has been a replacement of the disused castle with a hotel. Regarding the western side of the
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, the showers and toilets have doubled.
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, the place for fishing boats has switched
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marina
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 which is a place for private yachts.
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, the entrance for southern car parking,
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 used to be from the Main
Road
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 on the left, has moved to be from the
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. Some cafes and shops have
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 been added to the
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. Taking a closer look at the right side of the map, the number of docks increased from 1 to 2.
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, a
road
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 has been constructed, connecting the
Road
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 to the hotel. The southern beach
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 was public previously in 2000, now is only allowed to
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 by the hotel's passengers.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
While the details are well-represented, ensure each paragraph focuses on one key idea to enhance overall cohesion. Group related changes in the same section to make the text flow more logically.
complete response
The essay provides a comprehensive and detailed description of the changes in the harbor, effectively addressing the task prompt.
relevant specific examples
Specific examples and comparisons between the two time periods are well-chosen and relevant to demonstrate the changes that have occurred.
supported main points
The essay maintains a logical flow with well-described changes, guiding the reader through each alteration with clarity.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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