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The charts below show the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the amount of
households
 in the United
state
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States
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 by their annual wage in 2007, 2001 and 2015.
Overall
, It is noticeable that the
quntity
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quantity
 of
households
 in
75,000
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the 75,000
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-99,999
dollers
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dollars
group
 accounted for the least at around 15
millions
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million
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 in all years.
While
,
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apply
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 The people who earn money more than 100,000
are
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apply
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stood
at
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in
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 the highest
households
 except in 2011. Looking at the graph more closely, It is
noticable
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noticeable
 that in 2011, the number of
households
 in the two smallest income groups surpassed the highest income
group
 compared to the both 50k-75k and 75k-10k groups
remaind
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remaining
 stable at the two least
householdes
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households
householders
. It accounted for around 20
millions
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million
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 and 15
millions
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million
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,
respectibly
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respectively
. The
combined
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combination
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 of these two
groups's
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groups'
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hoseholds
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household
number
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numbers
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 is
simillar
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similar
as
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to
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 the amount of
househole
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households
 in 100.000 and more income
group
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groups
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 in 2015, recording 35
millions
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million
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.
Moreover
this
 year, The
group
 who make more than 100,000 dollars ranked back to the highest number of
household
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households
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, group, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • household income
  • economic fluctuations
  • income brackets
  • economic downturns
  • economic growth
  • global financial crisis
  • recovery
  • middle-income bracket
  • trends
  • proportion
  • stability
  • stagnation
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