Art should be a compulsory class for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some

poeple

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people

argue that students should take

art

classes

compulsorily. I totally agree with that idea because those lectures are helpful for

teenagers

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brain circulation and make them

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stresses

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they get from school lives. Our brain is consisted

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two parts.

One

is related to logical thoughts and the other is part of emotions. To maximize our brain power fully,

human

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need to use both parts equally. If someone is tilted to only

one

side of it, he or she could easily exposed to lose

ability

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to use

other part

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.

For example

, there was an experiment conducted in Korea. A group which took math and

art

class

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classes

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together recorded higher

score

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in both subjects, compared to the other group

took

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only

one

class. In conclusion, taking

art

classes

is helpful to increase students' academic results.

Futhermore

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Furthermore

, students could experience

variety

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feelings

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by

exposed

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to great artworks. Nowadays, many teenagers do not know how to control their minds.

Art

classes

could be an answer

for

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to

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that problem. By just seeing the

paints

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and

listening

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the music, they could feel comfortable.

For instance

, there is an article about people who can play at least

one

instrument is more happier than others. It means

,

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art

classes

is

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helpful not only for their skills but

also

mential

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mental

health care. Though there are plenty of advantages of

art

, we could easily forget the importance of that. To avoid that and

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fully enjoy its

benefit

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, I strongly

recommand

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recommend

schools have to force

student

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students

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to take

art

courses.