Some companies sponsor sports as away to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. discuss boyh sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, all sports events are
making
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by industries and huge companies. They can do it because
,
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they want to show themselves to watchers. Some individuals
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to think, that it is normal and has only advantages.
While
others prefer to say that it has backwards. Of course, both have their own pluses,
however
, I wish to agree with the first
one
. On the
one
hand, the disadvantages of the sponsors. Sponsor advertisements have
it
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so many and
one
of them is that they appear usual.
For example
, when I watch
the
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football matches I always see
the
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unnecessary things,
such
as
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advertisements. It can break your concentration on
match
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. When
the
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Pepsi, coca-cola and Lays show their logos every minute, you will feel anxious. When they sponsor the leagues or box fights, they hope to get
money
and income. Because of
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they won't attend the normal people's
prefers
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.
On the other hand
, we must talk about benefits.
One
of them is the salaries of athletes and other workers.
For instance
, the salary of football players who get millions of dollars
due to
contracts with big companies. The second benefit is popularity. With
money
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sponsors football or basketball clubs can make so many important and popular tournaments. And when players get their
money
, they will be motivated to play. In conclusion, I would say that both statements have their good and bad sides. Today all things cost
money
and because of them, we can watch big games and
fights
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of
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sportsmen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sponsor
  • advertise
  • brand exposure
  • visibility
  • brand image
  • reputation
  • targeted marketing
  • product placement
  • endorsement
  • support
  • community
  • athletes
  • economic growth
  • oversaturation
  • commercialization
  • unfair advantage
  • financially stronger
  • ethical concerns
  • influence
  • diversion of funds
  • negative publicity
  • backlash
  • beneficial
  • overall
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