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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph above displays the cost of
bananas
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 in Japan, France, Germany and the USE. During 10 years period.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Japan has the highest cost of
bananas
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 among the other nations,
while
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 USE
come
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comes
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 as the cheapest
bananas
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price
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 in the category. Looking at the information in more detail. In 1995 Japan had a significant peak with nearly 3
dollar
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dollars
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 per
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one
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apply
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kilogram of banana.
However
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 the
price
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drop
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dropped
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shaply
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sharply
 next year in 1996 to 2
dollar
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dollars
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 per
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one
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apply
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kilogram.
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While
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France's
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bananas
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banana
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 pricing was stable
in
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from
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 1994 until 1998 at approximately 1.70$ per
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one
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kilo.
Then
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 it
start
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starts
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 fluctuating towards the end of the period. Germany
also
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had
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fluctuated from the beginning of the period until 2002.
Banana
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The Banana
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price
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 stood at 1.25$.
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USE''S
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USE'S
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bananas
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selling
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sales
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 started at the lowest
price
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 in 1994 at nearly 0.80 cents per
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one
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kilo.
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 it increased over the years to
become
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1.15$ per
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one
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kilo of
bananas
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, price, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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