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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph above displays the cost of
bananas
 in Japan, France, Germany and the USE. During 10 years period.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Japan has the highest cost of
bananas
 among the other nations,
while
 USE
come
Change the verb form
comes
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 as the cheapest
bananas
price
 in the category. Looking at the information in more detail. In 1995 Japan had a significant peak with nearly 3
dollar
Change to a plural noun
dollars
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 per
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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kilogram of banana.
However
 the
price
drop
Wrong verb form
dropped
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shaply
Correct your spelling
sharply
 next year in 1996 to 2
dollar
Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
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 per
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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kilogram.
While
Correct word choice
apply
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France's
bananas
Fix the agreement mistake
banana
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 pricing was stable
in
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from
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 1994 until 1998 at approximately 1.70$ per
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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kilo.
Then
 it
start
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starts
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 fluctuating towards the end of the period. Germany
also
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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fluctuated from the beginning of the period until 2002.
Banana
Correct article usage
The Banana
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price
 stood at 1.25$.
Whereas
USE''S
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USE'S
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bananas
selling
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sales
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 started at the lowest
price
 in 1994 at nearly 0.80 cents per
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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kilo.
Although
 it increased over the years to
become
Verb problem
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1.15$ per
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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kilo of
bananas
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, price, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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