The graph below shows how people buy music. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The provided line graph depicts the purchase of various sorts of music from 2011 to 2018 years. Units are measured in fractions. Proportion.
From an preferences of
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that in
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streams
were the least popular kind of music, nevertheless
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product became the favorite
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purchase
and downloads steadily declined.
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CDs
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percents
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whereas
downloads stayed roughly at 35 and streams
was
represented / constituted a tiny fraction.
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were
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the line graph, Downloaded music steadily increased by 2014 and reached roughly (about/approximately ) 40 percent
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streams
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words
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streams
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