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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
health
 spending of Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in twelve European countries in 2002, 2007, and 2012. At first
glance
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 it is evident that
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 Switzerland has the highest
health
expenditure
 fraction of Gross Domestic Product,
while
 Estonia ranked
last
 on the percentage of spending. Specifically, we can split the countries into two
group
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 with
the
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 baseline of 8% of
expenditure
.
As a result
, Switzerland, Slovenia, Norway, The Netherlands, France, Denmark, and Belgium are countries that ever reach 8% of
health
expenditure
. Switzerland constantly recorded 11% of
expenditure
, making them
as
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a
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 country with the highest percentage of GDP spending on
health
.
On the other hand
, France ever
reach
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 11% of
expenditure
 in 2007, but the number decreased
until
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 9% in 2012. Meanwhile, The Netherlands had a gradual decrease
of
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health
 spending from 10% in 2002 to 8% in 2012.
In contrast
, Estonia, Lithuania, Luxembourg, Poland, and Spain had never got more than 8% of spending. Estonia placed
last
 for a constant 3% portion of GDP to
health
expenditure
. Interestingly, Lithuania and Poland
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 a gradual increase
of
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expenditure
 until
finish
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finished
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 at 6% and 7% respectively in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Current health expenditure: The amount of money spent on healthcare services and products at present.
  • - Percentage of GDP: The proportion of the Gross Domestic Product (the total value of goods and services produced in a country) allocated to health expenditure.
  • - Main features: The most important characteristics or aspects.
  • - Overall: In general; considering everything.
  • - Surpassed: Exceeded; went beyond.
  • - Decline: A decrease or reduction.
  • - Fluctuation: An irregular rise and fall; variation.
  • - Comparisons: The act of examining similarities and differences between two or more things.
  • - Largest increase: The greatest growth or rise.
  • - Most fluctuation: The highest degree of variation or instability.
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