In some areas of the United States, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

Late hours
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activities are widely popular among juveniles so in some
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in America it has been forbidden or they should be
along with
their supervisors. Recently, it has been a controversial issue whether imposing
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on teens
are
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a good idea or not.
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essay will express my positive orientation towards
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statement and elaborate on it extensively. Looking from
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perspective, the first and potential reason for
curfew
is preventing juveniles from being exposed to criminals. To put it differently, nights,
due to
their
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atmosphere and
also
free streets from people, provide a good opportunity to be sacrificed by criminals,
such
as muggers;
consequently
, teenagers are far
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threatened with bullying and kidnapping.
However
, it is undeniable that
this
aspect is true for other people even for powerful man too. In
this
regard, not being
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just is in vain and unreasonable. All in all,
this
reason cannot underpin the
curfew
. In terms of human
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, forbidding teens from being
outdoor
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at a certain time restricts their autonomy. It is psychologically proven that 15-to-18-year-old minors try to establish their personal boundaries and gain independence, so restriction would damage their delicate emotions and spirits.
Besides
, it is better to enlighten them about the outside dangers and let them
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face these challenges
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their own to be prepared for future issues.
For example
, if teens are forbidden from being outside at late hours, they will have problems with their night-shift jobs because they feel unsafe and cannot work efficiently. In conclusion,
curfew
lately is argued to be imposed on teenagers. Despite the fact that it could be beneficial in some aspects, namely
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the
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crimes, the
curfew
affects negatively children's personalities, particularly their confidence when they grow up.
As a result
, imposing is not a good idea, not being outside late can be
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naturalized
through
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.
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