The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time.
The bar chart illustrates
further
education
information for each two genders in Britain for the 1970/71, 1980/81 and 1990/91 periods. The diagram also
shows information about education
types like full-time or part-time.
Overall
,the number of students who selected full-time education
increased for both men and women between 1970 and 1991. And
Correct word choice
Also
also
the number of female student's
who prefer part-time Change noun form
students
education
have
an upward trend Correct subject-verb agreement
has
while
the men fluctuated.
Firstly
, The number of males that prefer part-time education
is top in 1970/71 then
it decreased in 1980/181 and rose again in 1990/91 to 900. For full-time education
the graphics rose steadily and peaked in 1990/91 with almost 250 students
For full-time Add a comma
education,
education
, the graphics is
similar to the females. But full-time Change the verb form
are
education
preference was slightly rose from 1970/71 to 1990/91 and peaked in 1990/91 with almost 1150 female students.Submitted by e.yildizhundur on
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