The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
percentage
of radio and TV audiences ( over the age of 4) during the day from 6am till 6am
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the next day in the UK, in 1992 between October and December.
Overall
, from the morning till
noon
Add a comma
noon,
show examples
the
percentage
of people who
listens
Correct subject-verb agreement
listen
show examples
to the radio is higher than the people who watch the television.
Moreover
, the
listeners
Change to a genitive case
listener's
listeners'
show examples
percentage
decreases
afte
Correct your spelling
after
noon till midnight,
whereas
the number of watchers increases. From 6am till 8am the proportion of radio listeners grew gradually from almost 10% to around 30%, after that the amount declined significantly to around 12% by 2pm, followed by a slight rise at 5pm at 15%.
Furthermore
, the figure continued to fall till it reached 1% after midnight Regarding TV audiences, their
percentage
faced minor fluctuations from 5% to 3% (at 8am and 12pm respectively).
In addition
, the number grew dramatically till it reached almost 45% at 8pm. Followed by a significant decline
at
Change preposition
of
show examples
almost 1% after midnight.
Submitted by shadaataria1 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, pm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: