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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagram depicts how
bricks
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 are manufactured for the building industry.
Overall
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, there are 7 distinctive steps involved in the
process
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, from the initial stage of digging
clay
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 to the eventual delivery of the finished product. The
process
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begin
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begins
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 with digging
clay
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 with
digger
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a digger
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.
Then
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, the
clay
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 is sieved with metal grind into smaller pieces. and sent to the roller. When the
clay
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 is carried by the roller, sand and water
is
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are
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 applied to the
clary
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clay
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. Afterwards,
bricks
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 are made by either slicing the mixture or placing it into a mould
. .
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.
...
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Then
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,
bricks
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 are kept in
drying
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a drying
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 oven for 24 - 48 hours. In the next stage, the
bricks
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 go through a heating and cooling
process
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. Moderate and high temperature ranging from 200c to 1300c is applied to the
bricks
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 in a kiln . The heating
process
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 is followed by a cooling
process
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 in a cooling chamber for 2 - 3 days.
Finally
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, the
bricks
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 are packed and
despatched
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dispatched
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 to their final destination.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, process, clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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