Some people think that competition at work, at school an in daily life is a good thing. Other believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A group person believes that between co-workers racing is a good thing,

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, some people

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situation. In their opinion, doing

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is better for employers and students in their casual lives. On the one hand, the competition of humans is useful for schools, workplaces, and other places. Particularly in the school

life

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. The students or pupils race each other. It impacts increasing their marks.

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, when I studied secondary school, I was a lazy child. Generally, my mother demanded to do my homework. I did not attempt to solve my problems. Some years later, I started reading more, because I realized that competition causes

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success.

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, a few years ago, I was accepted a new job. Cooperation preferred additional qualifications. There were many colleagues in these features. I must improve my job skills, so I attended some online courses and got several certificates.

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condition helps me every time.

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, the race between the people is being tiring. You spend much energy satisfying yourself. Sometimes

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case just does not happen around co-workers, even the boss' satisfaction plays a significant role here.

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, I

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situation in my work

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. Everybody tries to be the best. They achieved new goals and attended some conferences. I see most people who go to some places:

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are teachers' training, webinars, seminars, and exhibitions. Usually, these activities are not voluntary,

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is only competition’s manifestation. In conclusion, competition is what happens around in daily

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, school

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, and work-

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get to succeed, and demands much energy as well.

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Task Response

Ensure the essay addresses the topic by discussing both views more evenly. Consider developing the counterargument viewpoint in more detail.

Coherence and Cohesion

Improve the cohesion between sentences by using linking words more effectively, such as 'Firstly,' 'On the contrary,' and 'Moreover.'

Task Response

The essay clearly states the two opposing views on competition and cooperation.

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You included specific examples from personal experience to support your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

266 words

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Some people think that competition at work, at school an in daily life is a good thing. Other believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries young people are not only richer, but also safer and healthier than ever before. However, they are often less happy. What do you think are the reasons for this and what can be done to help?

Topic: The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Plastic bags, bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to slove this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?