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Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •thank your friend •explain how useful the present is •arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon

#friend #birthday #party #•thank #•explain #•arrange
Dear Sin, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to thank you for the present which I received on my birthday from you. As you know I am a
middle class
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 person who can afford only daily needs. For
full filing
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fulfilling
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 the dreams it is kind of impossible for me. I always wanted to get the
apple
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Apple
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 watch but never got the chance.
On
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At
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 my birthday party, after all went home I opened all the gifts and when I found your gift. I was on the moon, I can't explain
you
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to you
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 my feelings
of
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at
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 that time.
From
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Since
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 that day I have started using it and it is very beneficial. I didn't even
thought
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think
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 that I
will
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would
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also
 have
this
 watch. Because through
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the apple
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apple watch
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Apple Watch
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 I can regulate my health with the fitness app from my phone. As
,
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apply
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I am working in
campany
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company
 where phones are not allowed. Before, it was so difficult for me to communicate with others. Now, thankfully I can send messages from the watch.
As well as
, I have to do some calculations on work so I am using it now.
Overall
,
this
 watch has made my life much easier than before. Please let me know if you are free
this
 weekend so that we can spend some time or can you somewhere. Hope to hear back soon Yours faithfully, Jin
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the long paragraphs into shorter ones to make your points clearer and easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all expressions are clear and directly convey the intended meaning. For example, the phrase 'I was on the moon' can be confusing and might be better expressed as 'I was over the moon,' which is a more common idiom.
coherence cohesion
Review the letter for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases to improve clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
The letter covers all the necessary points: thanking the friend, explaining the usefulness of the gift, and suggesting a meeting.
task achievement
Very friendly and warm tone throughout the letter, suitable for informal communication with a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes appropriately with greetings and sign-offs that are fitting for the context.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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