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The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. an

The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. an
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The picture illustrates the data about
growth
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the growth
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 of the fish called salmon.
Overall
 the process consists of seven stages. Starting with hatching, developing and ending with
dieing
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dying
 as spawning
adult
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adults
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. In
first
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stage
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stage,
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 the eggs in
fresh water
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freshwater
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hatches
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hatch
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 in about three months. After that eggs
becomes
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become
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 alevin and
feeds
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feed
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 off yolk-sac for several weeks.
Than
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 it is Fry
moreover
 it is five to ten weeks old and can swim In
following
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 stage, when fry comes to be parr, develops finger markings and it is several
month
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months
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 old. The smolt is one or three years old, will group and head out to sea. When they grow into
adult
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adults
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, they spend one to eight years at sea. And
then
 they die within as spawning adult
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cycle
  • diagram
  • life cycle
  • main features
  • overview
  • stage
  • salmon
  • comparison
  • differences
  • significant
  • summarize
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