Some people think that way to reduce crimes is long term prisons while others think that there are other ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Reducing
crimes
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is
contentious
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debate,
whereas
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some people think that
way
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the way

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to minimize
crimes
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is
long
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apply

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periode
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periods
period

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prisons
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of prisons

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,
others
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and others

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think that there are other ways. From my perspective,
encourage
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encouraging

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awarness
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awareness

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and
improve
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improving

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live quality of society with help from
government
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the government

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can prevent
crimes
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.
This
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essay will examine some points
how
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on how

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to reduce illegal activities.
To begin
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with, there are
numerious
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numerous

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illegal activities,
such
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as
,
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apply

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robbery, thievery,
hijecking
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hijacking

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, sexual
harasment
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harassment

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and other
crimes
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. The main reason why people do
such
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things
because
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is because

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inadequite
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inadequate

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life.
For example
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, a robber
force
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forces

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him self
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himself

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to plan a heist
due to
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the luck
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the luck

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luck
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lack
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of
economy
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the economy

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,
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however
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however,

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we all need to survive in
this
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life. talking about punishment,
long period
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long-term

The word long period doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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prisons might
can
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apply

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reduce those
crimes
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for a
while
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, but what
happened
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when they
released
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are released

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one day?
is
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Will

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this
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solution
will
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apply

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permanently solve those issues
?.
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?

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In
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On

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the other hand, people think and
prever
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prefer

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another way to prevent
this
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issue. In some countries, there are
roles
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rules

The word roles doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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and punishments
to
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for

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every
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crimes
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crime

The singular quantifier every is followed by the plural noun crimes. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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,
for example
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, In North Korea, The Government give the death penalty to
corruptor
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corruptors

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,
this
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may solve the crime but only in certain
crime
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crimes

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, how about
another
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another crime
other crimes

The adjective another appears to be modifying the plural noun crimes. Consider replacing it with the adjective other.

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crimes
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with different
level
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levels

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of
criems
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crimes
crime

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?
is
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Does

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the death penalty
can
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apply

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apply to all
criems
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crimes

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?.
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?

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If I look closely
to
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at

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the level of
criems
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crime

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, some issues can
prevent
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be prevented

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by acknowlege
society about
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society's

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awarness
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awareness

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and how to be a well human being,
additionally
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support
government
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the government

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is very essential here,
such
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as
build
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building

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adequite
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adequate

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homes,
give
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giving

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social fundamental equipment, health
servicess
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services

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, and support education to lead a prosperous socity.

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relevant specific examples
Try to elaborate more on the examples provided. Adding specific, detailed scenarios can make your points stronger and more convincing.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on presenting a more balanced examination of both views in your essay. Ensure that both perspectives are given adequate consideration before stating your opinion.
logical structure
Provide a stronger conclusion that summarizes your main points and clearly indicates your stance.
introduction conclusion present
Good introduction of the topic and expression of your personal opinion early in the essay.
complete response
The essay addresses the task of discussing both views and gives a personal opinion, which is essential for a complete task response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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