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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010-2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010-2017
#tourists #caribbean #island
The line graph
show
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 the
number
 of
tourist
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tourists
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 visiting a Caribbean
island
have
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has
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 changed from 2010-2017. The line of
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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remain
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remained
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 stable in 2010 and 2011.
it
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 increased from 0.75
million
 to 1.5
million
during
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from
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 2011 to 2013.And
then
 there were
equakk
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equal
number
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numbers
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 in the following two years.
Thetotal
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The total
 trend of it is steady despite a slight fall
1.23
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of 1.23
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million
 in 2016. The
tourists
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number of tourists
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 staying on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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always
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was always
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 lower than that staying on
island
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the island
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 before 2016.
it
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It
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 rose or
drop
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dropped
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 between 0.23
million
 and 0.5
million
 before 2013 and
having
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had
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an expension
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expension
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expansion
extension
 until 2017.It surpassed the line of
that
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apply
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staying on
island
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an island
the island
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 in 2015-2016.
Finally
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Finally,
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 it reached 2
million
 in 2017. The total
number
 of
tourists
 visiting a Caribbean
island
 is the sum of
tourists
which
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who
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staying
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stay
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 on
island
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the island
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 and
staying
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stay
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 on cruise
ship
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ships
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.It
have
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has
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rising
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risen
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 from 2010 to 2017 expect staying the same
number
 in 2015 and 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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