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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own oppinion.

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Learning a new
language
 changes our perspective on life. A new
language
 opens the door to getting to know new cultures. A new
language
 helps us talk to new people we get to know their culture closely and learn their perspective. Some people try to learn the
language
 and culture of a new country before
traveling
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 to that country.
This
 is not wrong, but it does not help us learn the culture and
language
 of that
language
 in a permanent way. It helps our trip to be enjoyable
momentarliy
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momentarily
, we do not forget the experiences during our travel, but we may forget the
language
 over time
beacuse
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because
 we will not use it. If we have to learn a foreign
language
 for work, it may be difficult to learn it
beacuse
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because
 it is a necessity, but it will be difficult to forget it as it will be transferred to our permanent memory as we use the
language
. In both cases, learning a
language
 is very nice,
getting
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and getting
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 to know new cultures,
learning
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and learning
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 the idioms and perspectives of new cultures is nice and
development
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. But the most basic thing we should forget is that as
lons
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long
 as the
language
 is used, we will be
forgetten
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forgotten
.
Therefore
, no matter what
language
 we learn and for what purpose, the important
things
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thing
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 is to repeat and practice regularly. Learning a
language
 is difficult and if it is not repeated, it will be forgotten. The tongue
also
 needs attention like a baby. The factor that makes learning a
language
 difficult is avoiding constant repetition
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention how learning a language can lead to better job opportunities beyond just the necessity for work.
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Focus on providing a clear conclusion that summarizes your main arguments and states your opinion explicitly.
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Work on improving the logical structure of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph flows naturally into the next.
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Your introduction effectively introduces the topic and sets the stage for further discussion.
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You have a clear understanding of the reasons people might learn a foreign language and what benefits it can bring.
coherence cohesion
You effectively use transition phrases, showing a good understanding of coherence and cohesion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proficiency
  • Multinational companies
  • Cultural immersion
  • Cognitive development
  • Mental agility
  • Personal satisfaction
  • Empathy
  • Global awareness
  • Intercultural competence
  • Linguistic knowledge
  • Practical utility
  • Intrinsic benefits
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