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Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence while other say they should be free to make noise without limitations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Freedom
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 of
opinion
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 is a contentious debate,
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whereas
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some
people
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 think that, talking too
musch
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much
 is a criminal offence.
However
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, I agree that
everyone
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have
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 the right to
freedom
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 of
speach
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speech
, because it is
parts
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part
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 of human rights, regardless
nationality
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, and sex.
This
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 essay will
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examine
 some points regarding
to
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freedom
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 of
opinion
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.
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 with, there are numerous reasons why
people
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 say that
someone
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 who
talk
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to
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too
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 much is a criminal offence, because not all
people
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fell
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feel
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convinience
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comfortable
 with excessive opinions, some
people
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found
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find
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 it
as
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an
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 annoying habit, and not
everyone
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 can
accepted
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accept
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 it.
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, In a formal forum,
someone
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 can give her/his opinions but with
limitations
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 time, by that,
someone
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 who wants to give his/her opinions can
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 it without bothering or
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wasting
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 other
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people
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 time.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 think that
everyone
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 has their own
opinion
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 and they have
right
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the right
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 to
freedom
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 of
opinion
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, I agree with
this
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 view, considering,
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everyone
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that everyone
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not
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does not
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 have
ability
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 for public speaking,
however
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 they want to present their
thought
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thoughts
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. As human
being
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beings
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, we need to respect other perspectives, normalizing excessive noise.
To conclude
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,
despite
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somehow, listening to
someone
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 who has excessive noise is a bit
annoyed
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. Because not
everyone
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convey
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conveys
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 with pleonastic noise,
however
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 as human
being
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beings
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, we have to realise that
everyone
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 has their human rights.
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task achievement
Ensure the introduction clearly outlines both views mentioned in the prompt.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen your support for each viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by using more transitions between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Clarify main points in each paragraph for better cohesion.
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The essay discusses both views, which is essential for this type of question.
coherence cohesion
A conclusion is provided, summarizing the discussion points.

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