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Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence while other say they should be free to make noise without limitations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Freedom
 of
opinion
 is a contentious debate,
whereas
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some
people
 think that, talking too
musch
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much
 is a criminal offence.
However
, I agree that
everyone
have
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has
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 the right to
freedom
 of
speach
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speech
, because it is
parts
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part
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 of human rights, regardless
nationality
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of nationality
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, and sex.
This
 essay will
eximine
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examine
 some points regarding
to
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apply
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freedom
 of
opinion
.
To begin
 with, there are numerous reasons why
people
 say that
someone
 who
talk
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talks
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to
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too
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 much is a criminal offence, because not all
people
fell
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feel
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convinience
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comfortable
 with excessive opinions, some
people
found
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find
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 it
as
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an
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 annoying habit, and not
everyone
 can
accepted
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accept
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 it.
For Instance
, In a formal forum,
someone
 can give her/his opinions but with
limitations
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limited
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 time, by that,
someone
 who wants to give his/her opinions can
optimized
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optimise
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 it without bothering or
waste
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wasting
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 other
people
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people's
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 time.
On the other hand
,
people
 think that
everyone
 has their own
opinion
 and they have
right
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the right
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 to
freedom
 of
opinion
, I agree with
this
 view, considering,
everyone
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that everyone
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not
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does not
did not
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 have
ability
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the ability
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 for public speaking,
however
 they want to present their
thought
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thoughts
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. As human
being
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beings
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, we need to respect other perspectives, normalizing excessive noise.
To conclude
,
despite
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apply
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somehow, listening to
someone
 who has excessive noise is a bit
annoyed
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annoying
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. Because not
everyone
convey
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conveys
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 with pleonastic noise,
however
 as human
being
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beings
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, we have to realise that
everyone
 has their human rights.
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Ensure the introduction clearly outlines both views mentioned in the prompt.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen your support for each viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by using more transitions between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Clarify main points in each paragraph for better cohesion.
task achievement
The essay discusses both views, which is essential for this type of question.
coherence cohesion
A conclusion is provided, summarizing the discussion points.

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