Historical objects in museums all over the world should be returned to their country of origin.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I think the
artifacts
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don't have to be returned to their country of origin.
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the perspective of
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protection
,the place where
artifacts
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belong
to
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may have not enough necessary measures to protect
artifacts
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from stealing or damaging.A shortage of medical resources and
finance
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support will make against the
protection
work.Settling down the
artifacts
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from countries which suffer from war or illness is
also
a way to respect the custom and local culture.The famous museum
have
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the
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better security measures so that it can proceed
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the
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the protection of the artifacts
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artifacts
protection
smoothly.
The another
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perspectives
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is displaying
artifacts
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.In more techinquelly and modern
city
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,
musume
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music
can
make
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some ways to help cultural relics
display
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.
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,
musume
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museums
can use multimedia to add
introduction
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an introduction
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about the
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,
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and conviently
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conviently
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conveniently
improve
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interaction
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between the
artifacts
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and
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.
Otherwise
,
specializd
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specialised
archaeologists and professional guides support the visit process getting better. In conclusion,I think it
is not have
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to return the
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to their original country in the
perspectives
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of their
protection
and display.
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