Some people believe that new science related to criminal forensics should be used to look at old cases. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

New invention related to criminal forensics is a contentious debate
whereas
some people think that
it
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they
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should be used to investigate
at
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apply
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old
cases
. I firmly agree with
this
view, because we can utilize the
advance
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of
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in
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technology to recall old
cases
which not
solved
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yet to find the
truth
for justice.
To begin
with, one of the fundamental
principal
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principle
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in Law is
equility
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equality
before the law, everyone has their own rights
in
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under the law. Before the new invention
relate
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related
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to criminal forensics, there
are
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were
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numerous
cases
not solved yet and authorities closed those
cases
due to
lack of
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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, leading to injustice. I totally agree
if
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that
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the
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that
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new science should be used to
figured
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out
at
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old
cases
.
For example
, a family member
had
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abused by
criminal
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a criminal
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,
however
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however,
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due to
lack
evidence
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of evidence
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, the authorities could not make a fair decision to the criminal.
On the other hand
, some people believe that it is good to not look at the old
cases
,
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because it might be open the bad memories. Sometimes
for
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some people need
long
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time to be healed, and
some points
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sometimes
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we better not know the
truth
for
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about
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mental health.
For Instance
, if something bad for our family member,
how
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what
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if the suspect is from the family?
To conclude
,
despite
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somehow, knowing the
truth
can open
the
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a
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bad memory, but from my perspective
its
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it's
it is
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good to know the
truth
for justice and it will answer the
curiousity
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curiosity
.
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