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The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. af

The diagram below shows the life cycle of salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. af
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The process diagram illustrates how can be life salmon change
throw it is
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through its
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 life cycle.
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 , there are five types of
the
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apply
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fish
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. Starting with eggs in
fresh water
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freshwater
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fish
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 and ending with spawning
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adult
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adults
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 there is still
have
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one
steps
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about
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in
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fishes
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fish's
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 growth. In the first stage of fishing
growth
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grow
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 eggs in
fresh water
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freshwater
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hatching
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 in, about three months
for becoming
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to become
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 alevin
fish
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.
Next
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The next
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 step
feed
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feeds
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 off
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the yolk-sac
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yolk-sac
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yolk sac
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for several weeks and passes to
Fry
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the Fry
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 step. In Fry
fish
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 that are in five or ten weeks old standing swimming. Regarding the next
step
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step,
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fishes
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in
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at
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 several months old
develops
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develop
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 fonger markings parr.
Afterwards
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 when
fishes
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 turn one-three years they will grow and head out to sea. The
last
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 steps of growth
fishes
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 are moving on
adult
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 year.
Adult
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fish
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spends
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 one to eight years at sea.
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 to
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this
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this,
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 they
are
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apply
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spawn and die within two weeks in their spawning 
adult
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, adult, fishes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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