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The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts the
price
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 of cloth imported to seven important countries from the European Union in two years 1997 and 2003. After analysing the bar graph, it can be clearly seen that in Argentina the
price
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 of cloth per kg was higher in 1993 than in 2003, by
slight
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the slight
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 difference of 3
pounds
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while
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 in Brazil, the cost of clothing was identical in both years 1993 and 2007, that was almost 23 pound per kilo.
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 in Japan, the value was 15
pounds
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 in 1993 and in 2007, it was 13
pounds
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.
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, in these three countries the charges were higher in 1993, than in 2003.
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, it is noticeable, that in China the
price
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 was 10
pounds
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 in 1993, but increased to 18
pounds
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 in 2003.
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, in India, in 1993, the
price
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 was 7
pounds
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 which went up to 13
pounds
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 in 2003.In the
last
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 country, the amount was comparably lower in 1993 than in 2003 by a variation of 4 japan.
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, the
price
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 was at the peak in Argentina whilst it was at the bottom in Bangladesh.

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