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It is important for all towns and cities to have large outdoor public spaces such as park. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#towns #cities #spaces #park
Green areas have always constituted a significant part of each urban zone. Despite
this
, nowadays many cities seem to suffer from a lack of
such
an outdoor public spaces
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outdoor public spaces
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 which is widely
criticize
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 by many people. At the same time,
however
, others defend it claiming that there is no need for greenery in cities.
While
 each of these views has both pros and cons, I believe that green areas are
a
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 soul of each and every town. Outdoor public spaces have a positive influence on individuals. First and foremost, they allow people to break free from
hustle
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the hustle
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 and bustle of the crowded streets and spend some time in nature. Living in the city everyone needs
a
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apply
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time to breathe fresh air - not only does it
allows
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allow
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 you to relax, but
also
 has a positive impact on your well-being.
Furthermore
, greenery makes our environment more friendly for us. If there were no plants, the city would look
depresive
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depressive
,
therefore
, green areas play a key role in each urban zone allowing for
balance
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 between concrete and nature.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 voices that support a lack of greenery in the towns.
Such
 a voices
highlihgt
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highlighted
 that the urban zones are meant to facilitate work and
human's
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human
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 development. Cities have always been places that were made for people to work,
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Strengthen your examples and points that you make by adding relevant specific examples. This can help reinforce your arguments and make them more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear conclusion to your essay which summarizes your main points and provides a final opinion. A strong conclusion ties back to your introduction and provides clear closure.
coherence cohesion
While the essay has a logical structure, ensure clarity in your paragraphs with transitions to strengthen coherence and guide the reader smoothly through your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay opens with an introduction that clearly presents the topic and the writer's stance, which helps to establish the focus of the response.
task achievement
Positive influences of public spaces are well-explained, touching on their benefits for both mental well-being and environmental aesthetics.
task achievement
The essay touches on multiple perspectives, showcasing an effort to address both sides of the argument.

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