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Writing task 1 The graph below shows the percentage of river water in the UK that is of good chemical quality, in the period between 1990 and 2002.

Writing task 1 The graph below shows the percentage of river water in the UK that is of good chemical quality, in the period between 1990 and 2002.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of good chemical
qualities
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 present in the river water in the UK over the period 1990 to 2002.
Overall
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, it is evident that Wales had the highest amount of good chemical
quality
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 in 1990,
whereas
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,
scotland's
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Scotland's
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 river had
least
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the least
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 good chemical
quality
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.
To begin
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 with, Wales's
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rivers
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river
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 water
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qualities
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quality
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 changed
though out
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 the period starting from around 95% in 1990 and
dropped
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 to 80% in 2002. Meanwhile,
opposite
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the opposite
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 trend was observed in
rivers
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 of
the
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North Ireland, where good chemical
quality
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 started at roughly 85% and increased to more than 90% in 2002.
Furthermore
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, England's
rivers
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 had more than 40% of good chemical
quality
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 in 1990,
increased
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which increased
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 to 70% in 1996, after six years
qualities
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 accounted
at
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for
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 slightly less than 50%. In Scotland, more than 20% of
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qualities
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quality
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were
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 found in
rivers
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, which increased to 70% in 2000, but after two years
quality
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 declined by 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words qualities, quality, rivers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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