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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the changes
happened
Correct pronoun usage
that happened
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 in the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 time.
Overall
,
The
Correct article usage
apply
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several changes took place over a period of time the most observed
one
Correct pronoun usage
ones
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 are farmland and forest
park
Fix the agreement mistake
parks
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are
Wrong verb form
were
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 replaced with
sport area
Fix the agreement mistake
sports areas
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.
To begin
 with, in the northeast farmland
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 present which is now
expand
Wrong verb form
expanded
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 in size and
replace
Wrong verb form
replaced
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 with
golf
Correct article usage
a golf
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 course,
moreover
, in the south of
golf
Correct article usage
the golf
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 course new tennis court is
add
Wrong verb form
added
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. In the southwest, five
shop
Change to a plural noun
shops
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are convert
Change the verb form
are converted
are converting
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 into restaurants, and
in
Change preposition
apply
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the bottom near
sea
Correct your spelling
the
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 fish market is now
replace
Wrong verb form
replaced
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 with 4 new apartments. In the
north west
Correct your spelling
northwest
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 of the city, more than 10 houses were present which are now
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 in number
in
Change preposition
at
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 present time. In the south of the
city
Add a comma
city,
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 fishing port is
remove
Change the form of the verb
removed
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 in
present
Add an article
the present
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 year.
Whereas
, in the
southeast
Add a comma
southeast,
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 no change was observed in Hotel and cafe,
moreover
,
new
Add an article
the new
a new
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 car park is add
in
Change preposition
apply
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adjacent to
Hotel
Correct article usage
the Hotel
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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