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Some people believe that the governments should make universities free for all no matter what their financial background is. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many believe that
students
 in university shouldn't pay any tuition fees and that the government should make education free for all without considering someone's financial background. In my view, I strongly agree that learning must be without any expenses for everyone. In today's economy, everything is getting more expensive, including education.
Moreover
, many individuals have dreams to explore their interests and desires, but sadly the lack of money stops them from reaching their educational goals.
Hence
, the desire to study and reach
further
 places shouldn't have any cost.
Furthermore
,
the
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governments should take action to make it fair for everyone and free for everyone, because
this
 generation has a lot of potential to develop
this
 world and make it a better place, and in order to do that they need to study
further
.
Also
, when the tuition fees are free, the
students
 are able to afford other things,
such
 as housing and groceries.
In addition
, some countries are slowly taking
this
 step.
For example
, universities in Germany and Romania are not entirely free, but
students
 pay a small amount of money approximately 500 euros per year.
Consequently
,
students
 will have more money to spend on rent, food and activities
while
also
 expanding
thier
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their
 horizons. In conclusion, exploring our interests shouldn't have any costs. And it would be unfair
for
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 people with a detrimental financial background.
Therefore
, governments should make it fair for everybody by making universities free.
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task achievement
Try to expand on the specific benefits and challenges of free education to strengthen your argument.
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Consider presenting potential counterarguments and refuting them to add depth to your essay.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion that align with the overall argument.
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The main points are generally well-supported with relevant examples, such as the mention of Germany and Romania.
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The essay clearly states a position and supports it throughout the text.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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