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Compare between benefits of fossil fuels vs. renewable energy

In the beginning,all
people
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 used fossil
fuels
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 because it easily solved their problems.
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,fossil
fuels
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 are considered the oldest resource on the earth,so it is cheaper than other
resources
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. There are numerous
people
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 innovating a
lot
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 of ways to double fossil
fuels
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,and in the
last
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 15 years ago renewable
energy
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 appeared to help
people
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 rethink the resource's sustainability.
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, how they could invest,so we will discuss some benefits of renewable
energy
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 and fossil
fuels
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.
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,fossil
fuels
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 are the most popular and a
lot
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 of
people
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 prefer to
use
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 fossil
fuels
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instead
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 of renewable
energy
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 which requires a
lot
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 of care at the most time.
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,solar
energy
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 requires a
lot
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 of boards and cables. Fossil
fuels
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 are easier to
use
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 than renewable
energy
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,and it considered
ability
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 by all
people
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 because they cost a little ,and are more efficient than other energies.
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,it is simple to deal with it.
Secondly
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, There are several reasons for fossil
fuels
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,and one of them is investing these
resources
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 with other countries.
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, Iraq has 5% fossil
fuels
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 of the world,so if Iraq invaded
this
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 percentage with
neer by
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country
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a country
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 that
can
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could
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 help the economic development of Iraq
to be
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worldwide .
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,some
people
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 prefer fossil
fuels
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 because it's expectable for climate change.
for example
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, we can't
use
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 renewable
energy
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such
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 as wind
energy
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 and sunny days.
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, there are numerous
people
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 who prefer to
use
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 renewable
energy
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such
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 as solar
energy
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energy
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energy
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 because it is storageable . Some
people
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 want to protect the environment so they buy solar panels. For more,renewable
energy
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such
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 as solar, wind or any type of
energy
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 is considered
sustainable
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a sustainable
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resources
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resource
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.
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, fossil
fuels
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 are considered for resource depletion but the search or wind exists all most time.
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, they can't see all the benefits of all fossil
fuels
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 and they
seen
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 just some point of prose to
use
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 reenable
energy
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.
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, fossil
fuels
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 are a better type of
energy
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 that can give you fast and effective for a long time and with high quality
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 fossil
fuels
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 have some policies that protect the users unlike reenable
energy
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 because you buy it on your own responsibility. In conclusion, there are differences between
people
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's preferences for using fossil
of
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apply
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fuels
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 some prefer to
use
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 renewable
energy
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.
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,
resources
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 can help humanity to continue their life but all humans
has
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his
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their
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 or her way of living by using fossil
fuels
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 or reenable
energy
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.

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coherence cohesion
Work on enhancing the logical flow between paragraphs for increased coherence.
task achievement
Be sure to provide more detailed and specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Refine language use for greater clarity and to avoid repetition, particularly in the introduction.
task achievement
You provided a comprehensive reflection on both fossil fuels and renewable energy.
coherence cohesion
Your essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your argument.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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