In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the coming future, all
car
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,
bus
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buses
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, and trucks will become
driveless
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driverless
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. Only passengers will travel inside the
car
without
driver
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a driver
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. I believe the biggest advantage of
this
technology is that it will solve the problem of stressful driving in heavy traffic.
Whereas
,
this
will lead to
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in unemployment for so many cab and
truck
drivers
.
To begin
with,
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it is very difficult to drive
the
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car
in heavy traffic. After completing hectic
jobs
it will be very easy for
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people to come back home in
driverless
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a driverless
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car
.
This
feature will make life
very
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easier.
Jobs
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The jobs
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of
truck
drivers
are very difficult, they are driving
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a truck
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truck
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trucks
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on
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the highway
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highway
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highways
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for 16 - 18 hours which is very risky and tough, Automatic trucking will
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in saving
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the lifes
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lifes
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lives
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of
some
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apply
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many
truck
drivers
.
For example
: Tesla cars have
auto pilot
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autopilot
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mode which
make
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makes
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driving very easy.
On the other hand
, Increase in number of
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driverless
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cars will cause unemployment for the number of
drivers
. Most
of
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cabs driver
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cab drivers
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are running
there
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their
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home
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by earning money from driving, if conventional
taxies
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taxis
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are
replaced
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replaced by automatic driverless
taxies
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taxis
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, many
drivers
will
lost
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lose
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there
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their
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job
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jobs
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.
Same
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case is applied in
trucking
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the trucking
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industry. Tourist companies are
also
providing a lot of
jobs
to Bus
drivers
.
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: In
USA
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, Uber introduced
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driverless
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cab options, and after that thousands of cab
driver
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drivers
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lost
there
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their
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jobs
. In conclusion, Driverless cars will make
persons
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person
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life easier and
comfortable
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more comfortable
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. But,
this
innovation will take the
jobs
of
some
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many
drivers
.
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language
Consider revising sentences for grammatical accuracy and vocabulary range. Terms like 'driverless' instead of 'driveless' and 'cabs' instead of 'cab' will improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
To enhance logical structure, ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs and more directly related points to the argument in the introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
Improve your examples by providing a bit more detail, ensuring they directly support the argument you're making.
structure
Your essay has a clear structure with a defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task response
You addressed both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
task response
Incorporating examples like Tesla's autopilot feature effectively supports your points about the benefits of driverless technology.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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