In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
In the coming future, all
car
, Fix the agreement mistake
cars
bus
, and trucks will become Fix the agreement mistake
buses
driveless
. Only passengers will travel inside the Correct your spelling
driverless
car
without driver
. I believe the biggest advantage of Add an article
a driver
this
technology is that it will solve the problem of stressful driving in heavy traffic. Whereas
, this
will lead to increase
in unemployment for so many cab and Correct article usage
an increase
truck
drivers
.
To begin
with, Nowdays
it is very difficult to drive Correct the word
nowadays
the
Correct article usage
a
car
in heavy traffic. After completing hectic jobs
it will be very easy for the
people to come back home in Correct article usage
apply
driverless
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a driverless
the driverless
car
. This
feature will make life very
easier. Rephrase
much
Jobs
of Correct article usage
The jobs
truck
drivers
are very difficult, they are driving Add an article
a truck
the truck
truck
on Fix the agreement mistake
trucks
Add an article
the highway
highway
for 16 - 18 hours which is very risky and tough, Automatic trucking will Fix the agreement mistake
highways
helps
in saving Change the verb form
help
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the lifes
lifes
of Correct your spelling
lives
some
many Correct quantifier usage
apply
truck
drivers
. For example
: Tesla cars have auto pilot
mode which Correct your spelling
autopilot
make
driving very easy.
Change the verb form
makes
On the other hand
, Increase in number of driveless
cars will cause unemployment for the number of Correct your spelling
driverless
drivers
. Most of
Change preposition
apply
cabs driver
are running Fix the agreement mistake
cab drivers
there
Correct your spelling
their
home
by earning money from driving, if conventional Replace the word
homes
taxies
are Correct your spelling
taxis
replaced
replaced by automatic driverless Verb problem
apply
taxies
, many Correct your spelling
taxis
drivers
will lost
Change the verb form
lose
be lost
there
Correct your spelling
their
job
. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
Same
case is applied in Change the article
The same
trucking
industry. Tourist companies are Add an article
the trucking
also
providing a lot of jobs
to Bus drivers
. For example
: In USA
, Uber introduced Correct article usage
the USA
driveless
cab options, and after that thousands of cab Correct your spelling
driverless
driver
lost Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
there
Replace the word
their
jobs
.
In conclusion, Driverless cars will make persons
life easier and Change the noun form
person
comfortable
. But, Correct quantifier usage
more comfortable
this
innovation will take the jobs
of some
many Correct quantifier usage
apply
drivers
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language
Consider revising sentences for grammatical accuracy and vocabulary range. Terms like 'driverless' instead of 'driveless' and 'cabs' instead of 'cab' will improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
To enhance logical structure, ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs and more directly related points to the argument in the introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
Improve your examples by providing a bit more detail, ensuring they directly support the argument you're making.
structure
Your essay has a clear structure with a defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task response
You addressed both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
task response
Incorporating examples like Tesla's autopilot feature effectively supports your points about the benefits of driverless technology.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite