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Some expert believe that ia better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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In
this
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 contemporary era, in every country on the earth, there is disagreement around the topic of learning international languages. On
this
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 topic, few consider
kids
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 ought to learn new
language
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 at primary
schools
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while
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 others contend that children should learn outside
language
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 in grade 11 and grade 12. There are several upsides and downsides regarding
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 matter.
To begin
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 with, learning
new
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language
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 at primary school brings numerous benefits to the
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life
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. First and foremost,it is
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 proven that when
kids
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 are at primary
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schools
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school
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 their
brain
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 are more active than
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 stage in
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.
Consequently
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, young children can easily remember the new
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.
Likewise
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, in
young
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the young
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 stage of
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kids
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 are more passionate about learning new things;
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 they can easily
adoport
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adopt
adapt
 new
lingua
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languages
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 in their day-to-day.
For instance
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, a recent survey conducted by Time News of India indicates that learning
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language
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in
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at
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 the age of 10 to 15
are more
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easy
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easier
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 than learning
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their
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latter
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later
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 age.
On the other hand
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, there is no doubt some believe
kids
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 should learn foreign
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 at secondary
schools
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. Primarily, they believed
kids
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 are already overwhelmed
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schools
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 subjects.
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, if
schools
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 add extra foreign
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subject
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;
hence
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kids
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 will start feeling depressed from
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their studies
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.
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, some
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contend that
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 foreign
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 is not a paramount subject other majors
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 as technology, science, math and art are more important for their career growth.
As a result
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, they think
kids
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 can learn foreign
language
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 at any stage of
life
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. In a nutshell,
undoubdely
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undoubtedly
, learning
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a new
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language
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abroaden
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broaden
abroad
 a new career in
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. Henceforth, it is important to have
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 at primary school.

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The essay provides a comprehensive response by highlighting both the advantages and disadvantages of early foreign language learning.
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