Some expert believe that ia better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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In
this
contemporary era, in every country on the earth, there is disagreement around the topic of learning international languages. On
this
topic, few consider
kids
ought to learn new
language
at primary
schools
while
others contend that children should learn outside
language
in grade 11 and grade 12. There are several upsides and downsides regarding
this
matter.
To begin
with, learning
new
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language
at primary school brings numerous benefits to the
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life
. First and foremost,it is
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proven that when
kids
are at primary
schools
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their
brain
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are more active than
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stage in
life
.
Consequently
, young children can easily remember the new
language
.
Likewise
, in
young
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stage of
life
kids
are more passionate about learning new things;
therefore
they can easily
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adopt
adapt
new
lingua
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languages
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in their day-to-day.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Time News of India indicates that learning
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language
in
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the age of 10 to 15
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than learning
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age.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt some believe
kids
should learn foreign
language
at secondary
schools
. Primarily, they believed
kids
are already overwhelmed
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their
schools
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subjects.
Nevertheless
, if
schools
add extra foreign
language
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;
hence
kids
will start feeling depressed from
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.
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foreign
language
is not a paramount subject other majors
such
as technology, science, math and art are more important for their career growth.
As a result
, they think
kids
can learn foreign
language
at any stage of
life
. In a nutshell,
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undoubtedly
, learning
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language
abroaden
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broaden
abroad
a new career in
life
. Henceforth, it is important to have
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at primary school.
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