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The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.

The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.
#information #value #sources #fish #years
The information about the total value and sources of
fish
inported
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imported
 from different origins to Australia is provided in
Table
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the Table
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 chart and pie charts in three distinctive years, 1998,1992 and 1988. In
overall
, it is evident that
trade
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the trade
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 of
fish
 importing
exihibit
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exhibit
 significant popularity.
Whereas
 in 1988, the major source of
fish
 import trend experienced
rise
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a rise
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 and decline throughout the given periods.
To begin
 with
total
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the total
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 profit gained from the import business, in 1988, 6.57
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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dollors
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dollars
 was profited which
keep
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kept
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 on increasing to 8.52 and 10.72
Billon
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Billion
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dollors
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dollars
 in 1992 and 2000. Moving
further
 to the sources used by
US
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the US
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 to import
fish
, the highest percentage of
fish
 was imported from
Canada
 in 1988(60%). Followed by, other countries and
Canada
 with
the
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a
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 ratio of 27% in 1992 and 13% in 2000.
However
, in 1992, a significant change was faced when most of the
fish
 got imported from other countries, 46% and
Canada
 sourced almost half
amount
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the amount
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 of
fish
 to
US
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the US
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 as compared
to1988
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to 1988
.
Furthermore
, in 2000, when China began shipping 20%
fish
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of fish
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 to
US
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the US
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 and showed
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend, other countries and
canada
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Canada
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 showed
falling
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a falling
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 trend in the percentage of imported
fish
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Import origins
  • Total import value
  • Trends in import values
  • Trade patterns
  • Source distribution
  • Import dependency
  • Fluctuations in trade
  • Economic implications
  • Demand and supply dynamics
  • International trade policies
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