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The pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.

The pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.
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The table depicts the sum of money in billions of
dollars
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 regarding imported
fish
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 to the US, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of three different
countries
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 (
China
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,
Canada
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, and other
countries
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) as
fish
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 importers to the US in the period of 1988 until 2000. To commence, by 1988, the total value of
fish
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 imported to the US was 6.57
billion
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dollars
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, before rose dramatically by around 2
billion
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dollars
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 more in 1992, reaching 8.52
billion
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dollars
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.
Additionally
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, in 2000,
such
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 a total value was almost doubled compared to 1988, accounting for 10.72
billion
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dollars
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.
On the other hand
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, regarding the
fish
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 importers to the US, by 1988,
Canada
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 was the predominant
fish
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 exporter, amounting to 60% of the total portion.
This
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 was followed by
China
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 and other
countries
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 at about 40% less than
Canada
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 on average for each country, indicating a noticeable disparity.
In contrast
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, by 1992, the other
countries
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 had the largest percentage of
fish
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 distributors to the US at almost half of the proportion,
while
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Canada
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 and
China
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 distributed 34% and 20% respectively.
However
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, in 2000, other
countries
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 continued to be the biggest
fish
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 exporters to the US, reaching 42%,
while
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China
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 and
Canada
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’s percentages were almost identical at around 29%. To encapsulate,
although
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 the highest value for
fish
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 exports and imports business was in 2000, other
countries
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' categories were the dominant source for the US
fish
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 throughout the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, fish, countries, china, canada, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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