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The pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.

The pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.
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The table depicts the sum of money in billions of
dollars
 regarding imported
fish
 to the US, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of three different
countries
 (
China
,
Canada
, and other
countries
) as
fish
 importers to the US in the period of 1988 until 2000. To commence, by 1988, the total value of
fish
 imported to the US was 6.57
billion
dollars
, before rose dramatically by around 2
billion
dollars
 more in 1992, reaching 8.52
billion
dollars
.
Additionally
, in 2000,
such
 a total value was almost doubled compared to 1988, accounting for 10.72
billion
dollars
.
On the other hand
, regarding the
fish
 importers to the US, by 1988,
Canada
 was the predominant
fish
 exporter, amounting to 60% of the total portion.
This
 was followed by
China
 and other
countries
 at about 40% less than
Canada
 on average for each country, indicating a noticeable disparity.
In contrast
, by 1992, the other
countries
 had the largest percentage of
fish
 distributors to the US at almost half of the proportion,
while
Canada
 and
China
 distributed 34% and 20% respectively.
However
, in 2000, other
countries
 continued to be the biggest
fish
 exporters to the US, reaching 42%,
while
China
 and
Canada
’s percentages were almost identical at around 29%. To encapsulate,
although
 the highest value for
fish
 exports and imports business was in 2000, other
countries
' categories were the dominant source for the US
fish
 throughout the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, fish, countries, china, canada, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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