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People aim to keep a balance between their work and other parts of their lives, but few people achieve it. What are the problems in trying to achieve this goal and how can these problems be overcome?

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Today,people always want to get a good balance between
work
 and their lives,but in the competitive generation ,
work
 has become massively stressful ,we will get less and less
time
 to do our
favorite
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 hobby,
we
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and we
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 might feel exhausted.These social problems have existed for a long
time
,so
choose
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work
 and
lives
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life
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,people have immense pressure in
these problem
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. Some people want to relax after the working is difficult ,one of
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reason
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reasons
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 is technological progress, if employees at your company can not solve certain problems,they can convenient and quickly use
cellphone
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 or laptop to make phone
call
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 or send
email
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for
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 you, it is disturbing and hinder you relax after out of working
time
.
Secondly
,the highly competitive job market forces you
often
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work
 overtime,when you finish your job and leave the company, you only have a little personal
time
 can
relase
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relieve
 your stress,as soon as you arrive home,you need to go to sleep. Owing to these reasons,you do not have Individual
time
 to do your hobby, dividing a boundary in the
work
 properly may raise your standard of living.
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,ignoring any questions and
check about
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 job messages when you arrive home or
special
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 places.Second,do not bring your
work
 when you are in the home,it might make you nervous and uptight.
Additionally
,having a long vacation with family or
friend
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friends
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to
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too
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 far away these things which
make
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 you annoyed,and developing an active life lifestyle can improve physical fitness and decline stress. In conclusion,maybe
achieve
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the
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 working balance is difficult in our life, we have to find some solution to overcome the questions,
pherhaps
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perhaps
work
 and live relationships
is
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 not able to divide,
while
get
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 more free
time
,assigning
work
time
 properly is important,it will conduce to our expectations and optimize our daily lives.
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task
Your essay clearly states the challenges and explores potential solutions regarding work-life balance.
coherence
You provide a good introduction that sets the context of the problem and a conclusion that summarizes key points.

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  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • flexible work arrangements
  • remote work
  • unplug
  • boundaries
  • workplace culture
  • societal pressure
  • stress management
  • time management
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