Some people say that advertising is extremely succesfull at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
These days
people
argue that advertisement
has a big impact on our behavior
when Change the spelling
behaviour
bought
things, Wrong verb form
buy
while
others think that is
not useful anymore. This
essay will discuss both views.
First of all, over the years companies used advertisement
to Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
persuading
customers to buy. Wrong verb form
persuade
Although
they have a huge consumers in the market, they believe that should advertising
to gain more and more. Change the verb form
advertise
be advertising
For example
, a study at Harvard University shows that around 80% of people
in 2022 bought things just because they saw an advertisement
via social media. This
an evidence for
how Change preposition
of
advertisement
had a great impact on us in recent years.
On the other hand
, many people
say that advertisements
are so common current
years, Change preposition
in current
so
Correct word choice
that
people
do not pay attention anymore for any sponsored Ad. Because people
be
aware Wrong verb form
are
about
what they Change the preposition
of
are really need
and what Change the verb form
really need
are
not. Verb problem
they do
For instance
, One time I saw an advertisement
for thing
I Add an article
the thing
a thing
need
, and it Wrong verb form
needed
has
a discount for a Wrong verb form
had
while
, so I bought it quickly. Individuals buy things when they see it
in Correct pronoun usage
them
advertisements
if they really need it
.
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them
To sum up
, people
argue that if
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apply
advertisements
are have
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have
impact
on society and Add an article
an impact
individuals
behavior, Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
while
other
think is not have Fix the agreement mistake
others
effect
anymore because Add an article
an effect
is
so popular these days. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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esaay
Correct your spelling
essay
discuss
both views. In my Correct subject-verb agreement
discusses
opinin
, until Correct your spelling
opinion
opinin'
this
moment advertising the
best way for companies and Add a missing verb
is the
corporates
to reach their goals. Replace the word
corporations
And a
lot of Correct word choice
A
people
get benefits from advertisements
because they can see many options and decide what they buy. Moreover
, advertisements
help people
to know about new services and new products.Submitted by reem.b.albalawi on
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task achievement
Work on strengthening argument support by more clearly linking examples and explanations to main points.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitive structures, enhance variety and depth in sentence forms.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
task achievement
The essay fully addresses both perspectives of the topic, showing a balanced view.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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