Some people say that advertising is extremely succesfull at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days

people

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argue that

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has a big impact on our

behavior

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when

bought

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buy

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things,

while

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others think

that is

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not useful anymore.

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essay will discuss both views. First of all, over the years companies used

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advertisements

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persuading

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customers to buy.

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they have a huge consumers in the market, they believe that should

advertising

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advertise

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to gain more and more.

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, a study at Harvard University shows that around 80% of

people

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in 2022 bought things just because they saw an

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via social media.

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an evidence

for

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how

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had a great impact on us in recent years.

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, many

people

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say that

advertisements

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are so common

current

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in current

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years,

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that

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people

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do not pay attention anymore for any sponsored Ad. Because

people

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are

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aware

about

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what they

are really need

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really need

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and what

are

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they do

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not.

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, One time I saw an

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for

thing

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the thing

a thing

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need

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, and it

has

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had

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a discount for a

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, so I bought it quickly. Individuals buy things when they see

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them

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advertisements

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if they really need

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them

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To sum up

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people

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argue that

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apply

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advertisements

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are have

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have

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impact

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an impact

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on society and

individuals

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individuals'

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behavior,

while

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other

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others

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think is not have

effect

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an effect

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anymore because

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are

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so popular these days.

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esaay

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essay

discuss

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both views. In my

opinin

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opinion

opinin'

, until

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moment advertising

the

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best way for companies and

corporates

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corporations

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to reach their goals.

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lot of

people

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get benefits from

advertisements

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because they can see many options and decide what they buy.

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advertisements

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help

people

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to know about new services and new products.

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task achievement

Work on strengthening argument support by more clearly linking examples and explanations to main points.

coherence cohesion

Avoid repetitive structures, enhance variety and depth in sentence forms.

coherence cohesion

The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.

task achievement

The essay fully addresses both perspectives of the topic, showing a balanced view.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuasive
consumer behavior
brand awareness
emotional appeal
targeted advertising
social media platforms
ad fatigue
desensitized
ad-blockers
overexposure
brand loyalty
repetitive
irrelevant
personalized advertising
influencer marketing
interactive ads

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