Some people say that advertising is extremely succesfull at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days
people
argue that
advertisement
has a big impact on our
behavior
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when
bought
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buy
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things,
while
others think
that is
not useful anymore.
This
essay will discuss both views. First of all, over the years companies used
advertisement
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advertisements
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to
persuading
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customers to buy.
Although
they have a huge consumers in the market, they believe that should
advertising
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to gain more and more.
For example
, a study at Harvard University shows that around 80% of
people
in 2022 bought things just because they saw an
advertisement
via social media.
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how
advertisement
had a great impact on us in recent years.
On the other hand
, many
people
say that
advertisements
are so common
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years,
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people
do not pay attention anymore for any sponsored Ad. Because
people
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aware
about
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what they
are really need
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and what
are
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they do
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not.
For instance
, One time I saw an
advertisement
for
thing
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the thing
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I
need
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, and it
has
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a discount for a
while
, so I bought it quickly. Individuals buy things when they see
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them
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in
advertisements
if they really need
it
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them
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.
To sum up
,
people
argue that
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advertisements
are have
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impact
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an impact
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on society and
individuals
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individuals'
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behavior,
while
other
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others
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think is not have
effect
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an effect
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anymore because
is
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are
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so popular these days.
This
esaay
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discuss
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both views. In my
opinin
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opinion
opinin'
, until
this
moment advertising
the
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best way for companies and
corporates
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to reach their goals.
And a
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lot of
people
get benefits from
advertisements
because they can see many options and decide what they buy.
Moreover
,
advertisements
help
people
to know about new services and new products.
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task achievement
Work on strengthening argument support by more clearly linking examples and explanations to main points.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitive structures, enhance variety and depth in sentence forms.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
task achievement
The essay fully addresses both perspectives of the topic, showing a balanced view.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuasive
  • consumer behavior
  • brand awareness
  • emotional appeal
  • targeted advertising
  • social media platforms
  • ad fatigue
  • desensitized
  • ad-blockers
  • overexposure
  • brand loyalty
  • repetitive
  • irrelevant
  • personalized advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • interactive ads
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