The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The provided diagram illustrates the
process
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of a certain coal as a raw material for producing
electricity
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.
Overall
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, there are eight steps which have to be done before the
electricity
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can be used by houses or industries.
To begin
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with, the
process
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starts with mining the coal, and
then
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it is crushed into small particles by a crusher. After the coal is crushed, it
then
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will be collected in one place.
next,
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it will be carried by using a lorry to the trucks.
After
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this
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point, the
process
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are becoming more into changing the form of the coal, the coal from the truck is
then
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brought to a gasifier to separate the
gas
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and solid waste. After the
gas
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evaporates, it next passes the cooling
process
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using a cooler to lower the temperature. If the
gas
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has been cooled, it is
then
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transferred to a
gas
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power plant to produce
electricity
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, but at
this
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stage heat waste is produced.
Finally
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, the
electricity
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is ready to use for homes or industries.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, electricity, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • thermal coal
  • crushed
  • combustion
  • heat energy
  • boil
  • steam
  • turbine
  • generator
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • transformers
  • voltage
  • transmitted
  • power lines
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