The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The provided diagram illustrates the
process
of a certain coal as a raw material for producing
electricity
.
Overall
, there are eight steps which have to be done before the
electricity
can be used by houses or industries.
To begin
with, the
process
starts with mining the coal, and
then
it is crushed into small particles by a crusher. After the coal is crushed, it
then
will be collected in one place.
next,
it will be carried by using a lorry to the trucks.
After
this
point, the
process
are becoming more into changing the form of the coal, the coal from the truck is
then
brought to a gasifier to separate the
gas
and solid waste. After the
gas
evaporates, it next passes the cooling
process
using a cooler to lower the temperature. If the
gas
has been cooled, it is
then
transferred to a
gas
power plant to produce
electricity
, but at
this
stage heat waste is produced.
Finally
, the
electricity
is ready to use for homes or industries.
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